Arch390/790 Visible Certainty
University of Wisconsin-Milwaukee
Chris Cornelius, Associate Professor
Are these some of your own sketches? They are very nice
Nick, the drawings are beautiful, as always, and the narrative is a nice touch. Could you bring more of the text into the map visually? I appreciated the call outs, and maybe you plan on doing more of those, but ultimately, it just needs more visual relationships between the elements on the map to help the viewer make connections. So romantic...
I agree with Dana - conceptually, it is a really intriguing idea; however, it is not something I'd have gathered merely from looking at the layout. I imagine this is something you already plan to integrate, but my greatest struggle right now is understanding the transition from point to point on the layout. Is distance related to time, or does the flow of the story have less relevance to time and more to do with highlighting key points in history and integrating subtle nuisances that appear in addition to it? (i.e. first image is a dominant-point in your argument followed by tertiary points which defend this initial statement followed by another dominant point with a primary image and on and on). Finally, how can you blend all of this together to encourage the eye to go where you want it without the addition of arrows? Is there a subtle underlying layout or grid which the viewer can subconsciously begin using as a way-finding mechanism (i.e. color definition, pronouncement of imagery through opacity, etc.)Keep up the classy drawings - they're really spectacular.
Not sure what I could add to it... Your method for visualization of your topic is very unique and effective... there's a certain subtlety to how the concept progresses as it moves down the composition. Very nice.
Nick: very tasteful and expressive drawings. The graphics are extremely personal and kind of the "anti- Bjark Ingels" graphics that I find the profession and myself fall victim to because of their clarity and lack of argument. I would have arranged the text differently and kerned different characters, but, hey that's just me. Keep the vigor of the hand alive.Another thought is make this so illegible that one has to search for the meaning of text in the image. A nice visual riddle.
Cant wait for the text. I feel this would be the most successful, as with all successful narratives, to tell the simple story: introduce the protagonist as okay, introduce a crisis, and have the protagonist emerge as a fundamentally new person in the last act. Does your story have this? It very well could now, but since it is not finished I cannot tell yet. Also the story should be simple enough for the reader to follow without your help giving understanding to meanings. thanks, your work looks good and refreshing to see
Great graphics. alot of text to read. Maybe morph the two into one. I think the overall idea is a very interesting one that deserves attention, and shared with others.
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